Tin Roof Alley Poets

Workout Room – Exercises for Your Brain, Rules & Forms – Game On! => Experimental, Formalisms and Adaptations => Topic started by: Halo on June 24, 2013, 01:13 PM

Title: lineal redemption
Post by: Halo on June 24, 2013, 01:13 PM
LIFE
        a
        vision of
                    possibilities
             
          full of promise
                               that sometimes fails
                                       
                                                             becoming a
                                                                             dark
                                                                                   lonely
                                                                                           vista
                                                             love
                                                                  can
                                                                      turn it all around.

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Title: Re: lineal redemption
Post by: elise on June 24, 2013, 03:03 PM
Halo, what a fun style!   And what a TRUE poetic statement!  Well said!
 :rose
Title: Re: lineal redemption
Post by: Halo on June 25, 2013, 03:38 AM
thanks elise, an Australian Aboriginal poet inspired me. I'm reading her poetry titled ruby moonlight by Ali Cobby Eckermann. 

what inspired me:

NATURE

             nature
                        can
                              swirl

like

             a falling
                   leaf

sometimes

                   turning to
                             butterfly

or bereft on the ground

                turning to
                              dust

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I think it's beautiful  :comfort
Title: Re: lineal redemption
Post by: daisyxo on July 06, 2013, 08:53 PM
both poems are very beautiful ... and I can see how that one inspired you.
Title: Re: lineal redemption
Post by: A-FRIEND on August 09, 2013, 10:41 AM
The style makes my head spin. Glasses and bad eye sight will do that to ya' when you see things not in line. But once I got settled I figured out I was swirling by design. Nice, very nice.
Title: Re: lineal redemption
Post by: Halo on August 09, 2013, 12:50 PM
daisy and A-FRIEND,  thank you both for your positive appreciation!  :rose :rose