Tin Roof Alley Poets

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Title: is this the one?
Post by: Halo on June 09, 2012, 01:01 PM
before
the beginning
of again
a certainty
I witness every winter
the end turmoil
of fluttery bright red leaves
that grip the glory vine with
last minute strength
not wanting to be the
last to fall
the inevitable question
wavering in the wind
which leaf will be the last
to take that fateful drop
the last plummet
an infinitesimal crisis
on the emptying vine
that will be solved
by the last leaf's letting go.

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I find I must make note of the end of life with that terrible letting go of the last leaf every year.
I don't want to not make note of it.
Title: Re: is this the one?
Post by: cafeRg on June 09, 2012, 01:54 PM

Halo, you write with so much soul
the death of the last petal i love it
fresh and creative

Gotta tease you though,
It summer here high around 90C

         *poolparty*
Title: Re: is this the one?
Post by: Kay on June 09, 2012, 04:13 PM
I really like this.  the end line was my favorite

seems those leaves hold on for dear life sometimes. A good analogy for life.

good stuff.  :rose
Title: Re: is this the one?
Post by: Halo on June 16, 2012, 02:45 AM

Halo, you write with so much soul
the death of the last petal i love it
fresh and creative

Gotta tease you though,
It summer here high around 90C

         *poolparty*


Thanks Rg, I'm pleased you enjoyed this piece...   show off, just cos it's hot in Kentucky. :)
Title: Re: is this the one?
Post by: Halo on June 16, 2012, 05:48 AM
I really like this.  the end line was my favorite

seems those leaves hold on for dear life sometimes. A good analogy for life.

good stuff.  :rose

Thanks Kay, for the read and your comment, much appreciated. :)