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Title: Report on Destiny
Post by: theMerlin on December 17, 2007, 08:48 PM
Fell the warrior
all glory lost
His golden armor
coated in rust
Arrows nocked
adorn his back
Shield cracked
lances a-stack
Castle and manor
in sea of green
Love and honour
his simple dream

(C)  tM  2007
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: WordFaery on December 17, 2007, 09:09 PM
Merlin,

It is good to read you.

WordFaery
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: Rach on December 17, 2007, 09:32 PM
Nice poem.
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: annarkee on December 18, 2007, 04:45 PM
love and honor manifestations of a simple fantasy; i am always floored by your work... thank you
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: witt on December 19, 2007, 05:59 AM
The diction in this is wonderful. Takes the reader right back to those times. Love it!
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: Allen on December 19, 2007, 11:11 AM
I love your work, my lord.
I have always loved your work.

Sometimes, I become disturbed by the messages.
I have a legion of Knights at the ready.
Send me word, and we shall come.
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: gowerboy on December 20, 2007, 04:59 AM
Nice words.

Just not sure how an arrow
can be nocked and in his back
at the same time.
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: witt on December 20, 2007, 07:28 AM
I don't mean to step into Merlin's space, but the word nocked is an old word meaning there's a notch in the arrow made ready for the bowstring.
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: gowerboy on December 20, 2007, 08:17 AM
You're right. I took it in the other sense of the arrow
being fitted against the bowstring ready to be fired.
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: theMerlin on December 20, 2007, 10:27 AM
A nocked arrow indicates one ready for use.
'On his back' indicates arrows in a quiver, again, ready for use.
LACK of a bow neuters the value of the arrows, but then, everyone got that pointe, I am sure.

I failed at my intended effort to focus my final writings on clarity of purpose.
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: gowerboy on December 20, 2007, 01:57 PM
I took "arrows...adorn his back" as meaning that he'd been
slain from behind in cowardly fashion by a hidden archer.
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: Burk28 on December 20, 2007, 04:45 PM
Yes this piece in all its brevity is very fine ideed, well done
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: fragments on December 21, 2007, 04:59 AM
The arrows nocked thru me
then with the line as they adorn his back
it actually changes the context of the word nocked

1 a notch at either end of the bow for holding the string
2 a notch at the butt end of an arrow for receiving the string
3 to set an arrow on a string

arrows nocked by itself gives us #3--
but with the added" adorn his back"
we now get #2

I admire the piece for its brevity and it choice of language
it fits together very nicely
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: Voodoo Child on December 27, 2007, 09:42 PM
Ciamar a tha sibh, Merlin?

I liked this very much. But, then, I like all of your poems!

Peace...V.Child
Title: Re: Report on Destiny
Post by: theMerlin on December 28, 2007, 10:58 AM
Tá mé go maith, a cara.