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Offline cy street

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« on: August 27, 2006, 12:14 PM »
i like the one without the dress


in pursuit of your stolen eyes
bowls of wild cherries
apricots
difficult to pronounce peppers
open air markets
zaragosa

i am in the middle of something
could i call you back

tuesday at ten

yeah ten
the valley
migas in hidalgo
down from the mission
main street cafe
talk to you then

i say farewell
turn off the phone
before i undress
i try to remember
the last time a car passed by
a week
at least

beyond the pissarro
in the muddy bottom
ducks argue
something about sunfish
and snapping turtles

pretty soon
we can goose creek
take a breakfast off the roof
cloud watch
sketch characters
kill them with paper
bare hands

not today
your breathing reminds me
i breathe too
hidden like lemon cucumbers
your clenched lips
peek cautiously along your stillness
in the shade of hearts of palm

you rest like a tea kettle
resting
waiting
to make fortnum and mason
thank you
i sip your calmness
and forgetting is easier

your silences excite me
i like the one without the dress
blue crayon
adaptable
practiced in solitude
tagliatelle
wild boar
tomato
and grand cru pecorino

i confess
i get jealous of your pillow
an empty cup
a cube of sugar left behind

i missed your invitations
your sun soaked ankle
jack rabbits beneath your brim
a late night diner
the night before you left

pecans are falling
it sounds like fourth grade
on a tin roof
a riverfront
ten miles on foot
i did countless interviews
an afternoon in la condesa
scuba eggs
sips of silver tequila

i love you in spanish
i love your tasman sea
reflecting maple syrup
crawling your leg
making a ruckus without a breeze
now was always better than then

Offline champagne_shoes

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« Reply #1 on: August 27, 2006, 12:53 PM »
Oh, I simply cannot resist a feast such as this:

There are so many delicious images, phrases and lines, I'm at a loss where to begin.

Okay. I plunge into the tastiest morsels that delight my failing appetite:

stolen eyes....ducks argue.....you rest like a tea kettle....i like the one without the dress, i confess i get jealous of your pillow.... your silences excite me.  Your pluralizing silence induces an exciting effect.

cyalect at its best-est.

I also respond with tenderness to that plaintive taste of sadness:
your clenched lips
peek cautiously along your stillness


My one and only suggestion for enhancement would be to delete the redundant resting between kettle and
waiting

I love your poem.

c_s
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Offline cy street

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« Reply #2 on: August 27, 2006, 01:03 PM »
champagne shoes, do me a favor.  please look up a map of the whole isle of tasmania.

thank you,
street
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« Reply #3 on: August 27, 2006, 01:05 PM »
Ah this is delight Cy..... I have not seen so many delicious images and words together in a while.  I have not nits just a lot of envy, I can not write like this and I really want to.

eco




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« Reply #4 on: August 28, 2006, 12:56 PM »
Yes, Street. The assignment has been
       complete-d.

I found the compact "Apple Isle."

Are all your poems lessons in geography?

The Shoe Woman
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« Reply #5 on: August 28, 2006, 01:50 PM »
champagne shoes, if a woman referred to her own, "map of tazzy", to what would she refer?

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« Reply #6 on: August 28, 2006, 02:33 PM »
blushingly says, "Oh my." A more detailed comment will follow as I investigate the matter. I don't want to respond foolishly or offer premature...


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« Reply #7 on: August 28, 2006, 04:50 PM »
I think she would be referring to memory of things that bites?

Anger?

eco
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« Reply #8 on: August 28, 2006, 05:12 PM »
eco, have you had a look at the map?

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« Reply #9 on: August 29, 2006, 12:49 AM »
Cy I have now and it looks like the upper part of a leg, something like a "pecorino"  hanging .... Am I right?
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« Reply #10 on: August 29, 2006, 01:43 AM »
Was there ever any doubt.

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« Reply #11 on: August 29, 2006, 01:51 AM »
Cy ---

wonderful poem.

the cascade of food and other sensual images make this a love poem that takes no prisoners.

i recommend removing the incidental chatter, seems to add nothing and to my eye, proves distracting.  sans the distractions, everything remaining i could sell my arm for.

in pursuit of your stolen eyes
bowls of wild cherries
apricots
difficult to pronounce peppers.

beyond the pissarro
in the muddy bottom
ducks argue
about sunfish

pretty soon
we can
take a breakfast off the roof
cloud watch
sketch characters
kill them with paper
bare hands

not today
your breathing reminds me
i breathe too
hidden like lemon cucumbers
your clenched lips
peek cautiously along your stillness
in the shade of hearts of palm

you rest like a tea kettle
waiting
to make fortnum and mason.

your silences excite me
i like the one without the dress
blue crayon
adaptable
 
tagliatelle
 
tomato
and grand cru pecorino

i confess
i (am) get jealous of your pillow
an empty cup
a cube of sugar left behind
 
your sun soaked ankle
 
a late night diner
the night before you left

pecans are falling
 
on a tin roof
 
sips of silver tequila

i love you in spanish
i love your tasman sea
reflecting maple syrup
crawling your leg
making a ruckus without a breeze






{open air markets
zaragosa}

{i am in the middle of something
could i call you back

{tuesday at ten

yeah ten
the valley
migas in hidalgo
down from the mission
main street cafe
talk to you then

i say farewell
turn off the phone
before i undress
i try to remember
the last time a car passed by
a week}
at least}
{something}
{and snapping turtles}

{goose creek}

{resting}
{thank you
i sip your calmness
and forgetting is easier}
{wild boar}
{practiced in solitude}

{i missed your invitations}

{jack rabbits beneath your brim}
{it sounds like fourth grade}

{ten miles on foot
i did countless interviews
an afternoon in la condesa
scuba eggs}



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Offline cy street

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« Reply #12 on: August 29, 2006, 02:22 AM »
mojave
welcome to the ax

my name
cy bish port street
i make your acquaintance
as i open another bottle of nerello mascalese
blended
with nerello cappuccio

italians refer to this style
rossodiverzella

i read your takes
they are as bold as the wine

pardon me

hello

yeah this is street

the title

i told you
may i brand your forehead

cool

call me when you upload the video
ciao

mojave
sorry

that was my filmographer
editor
in brooklyn
he says hello
and asks me to ask you

have you ever been distracted

street




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Offline cy street

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« Reply #13 on: August 29, 2006, 02:24 AM »
eco, you are getting warmer.

street
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