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Offline chucklev

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« on: April 11, 2004, 04:05 PM »
Quote (cafeRg @ April 06 2004, 2:53pm)
this was fun to read ..nice flow and unfolding ..'bout all i can say this time around is mayb check your spellriotic..

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CafeRg -- I may be slow -- but I don't get your meaning.  Did I spell something wrong that I did not intend to?  Chuck

this was fun to read ..nice flow and unfolding ..'bout all i can say this time around is mayb check your spellriotic..

':bnik'

CafeRg -- I may be slow -- but I don't get your meaning.  Did I spell something wrong that I did not intend to?  Chuck
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« Reply #1 on: April 11, 2004, 04:01 PM »
Thanks, Witt, for your comments.  I wonder about the watch -- I wanted an expletive that conveyed a lot of anger; and I wanted plain-speak to express "class".  On a construction site, the language I used is mild.  "Idiotic" doesn't do it -- not strong enough.  But I will think more about it.  Chuck
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« Reply #2 on: April 11, 2004, 11:17 AM »
I enjoyed the "otic" puns a lot.
Wouldn't the watch better be "idiotic"?
With lack of word power, should we be profane?
So many words to be verbotic,
Word play need not be inane.





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« Reply #3 on: April 08, 2004, 11:43 PM »
wow very well done..............Bravo .....................wh at a blaster................ ....well said...........deep message here
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« Reply #4 on: April 06, 2004, 06:53 PM »
this was fun to read ..nice flow and unfolding ..'bout all i can say this time around is mayb check your spellriotic..

':bnik'
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« Reply #5 on: April 04, 2004, 08:41 PM »
Love of Country

Which patria do I otic?
If I were matriotic, what would I love?
If I killed or died for you, would you be proud?
If you cooked my meals, does that make you Stomatic?

I observe the moon and love her --
I am a lunatic.  When the sun rises,
I am thrilled to be sunatic.
And now Mars!! I be Mariotic!

I write to the electrical contractor
Who commanded pop’s loyalty for 50 years;
Thanks for the gold watch, it meant a lot to him.
I wonder where that fucking watch is now.

I write to the quack’s estate, the one
Who gave mom placebos for 40 years.
Thanks inheritors, the blue medicine
Was worth every penny.  Enjoy!

These are my heroes:  builder, connector, watchmaker!
Cook, raiser of good and bad boys, queen
Of the sidewalk coffee klatch, imbiber of blue syrup.
Bread winners and losers.  Some survivors, some not.
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« Reply #6 on: April 10, 2004, 09:17 PM »
Very clever play on words Chuck....fun to read!
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