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Offline Spurs And Stetson

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Untitled
« on: November 18, 2019, 07:51 PM »
so suffered you with the unrestrained me
uncontrolled me
the me that sends running others

so burns the star
sol we see
souls are we

so sought you i
brought you to me
we

long have I loved, and
longed your fair skin
kissed by the sun
run the tall grass

bring you i
the bluebells
string hazel
kiss you finespun

i want you
as the Spring does
blossomed flower

-Christopher Todd Dallas
November 18, 2019

Offline daisyxo

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #1 on: November 19, 2019, 03:07 AM »
Love this ... your writing style is unique and refreshing.
~ Marsha ~
 

"Abilities wither under faultfinding, blossom with encouragement." -- Donald A. Laird

Offline elise

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #2 on: November 23, 2019, 11:51 AM »
I enjoyed your own reversal of modifiers!  In a few places I thought of Master Yoda lamenting the loss of his mate. 
This was a fun yet tender read... Love it!  Well done! Clever you are!
 :rose
I felt it shelter to speak to you  ~Emily Dickinson

Offline Wordweaver

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #3 on: December 31, 2019, 01:10 PM »
i want you
as the Spring does
blossomed flower

That is hard to beat and one I would be proud to have fathered.
Great write.
Weave
a good poet is like a bride
Something old, something new, something borrowed
but mostly you.

Offline Angel Of Incidence

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #4 on: January 28, 2020, 06:54 PM »
A very unique style that makes me think all the way through. I enjoyed this!!!

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Re: Untitled
« Reply #5 on: February 03, 2020, 12:06 AM »
Welcome Sir.
Enjoyed your write
Stop looking at the light. Instead, look at what is being illuminated by the light.