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Offline elise

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Your Company to Keep
« on: November 18, 2019, 04:55 AM »
Your Company to Keep

your carriage black stops at my door
velvet curtain drawn aside
a nod and gesture beckoning
for me to come inside
 
your message soothing to my ear
so long since I was seduced
magnetic language draws me in
and gives my soul a boost
 
the tolling bells the carriage black
have set my course in stone-
why would I let your carriage pass
when I am so alone
 
I glance first left then right again
to be sure we are not seen
Taking offered hand I step inside
to sup on your cuisine
 
the banquet hall is all laid out
your feast a comfort fare
of memories spanning eighty years
a love-long life affair
 
in my cup is offered rest
respite from all the pain
eagerly I drink it up
and meet your gaze again
 
your boney fingers reach for me
loosing cobwebs from my soul
your grim whip cracks and we are off
the welcome death bell tolls

elise
 
I felt it shelter to speak to you  ~Emily Dickinson

Offline daisyxo

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Re: Your Company to Keep
« Reply #1 on: November 18, 2019, 01:38 PM »
elise ... this poem stirs quite a range of emotions ... it feels like a love affair that has spanned for years, a comfort, and yet it feels a bit shady, and implicates a chill in the air.  I really like this one ... my favorite line is:  "a love-long life affair"
~ Marsha ~
 

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Offline Spurs And Stetson

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Re: Your Company to Keep
« Reply #2 on: November 18, 2019, 07:48 PM »
I love the use of reversing the modifiers.
"your carriage black stops at my door "
Right away I am transported to Romania in the dark evening.
Something rainy and muddy outside like the film, "Le pacte des loups."
Lanterns hang from the carriage.

Offline Wordweaver

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Re: Your Company to Keep
« Reply #3 on: December 31, 2019, 01:06 PM »
Elise, this is your best work ever and deserves many readings.
Recognition of a persons work should never be ignored for
lack of time or effort to do so.
Weave
a good poet is like a bride
Something old, something new, something borrowed
but mostly you.

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Re: Your Company to Keep
« Reply #4 on: January 28, 2020, 06:51 PM »
Great story that captures many emotions. I like!!!