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Offline mojojames

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Romeo and Juliet Redux (sonnet)
« on: July 15, 2018, 11:03 PM »

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Poppin’ off at each other, cuddies were,
young kinky murrr! to a snoopy neighbor,
nasty shit-hounds worryin’ a preacher.
Hid out from a peepin’ nose-head stalker,
blown away by each other, hearts full jar,
gave each other a dose of neon blue.
Fam’lies pissed as tom's in a gay cat bar,
the twosome jumped up with a deadly clue,
blotter mixed with dizzy supah el-bleen,
yah, was gonna cool out their chill heart thang.
way too zonk, the cocktail, super-bad spleen,
turned both their lights to endless midnight blang.

Dressed formal for the hook-up, down for night,
eternity over them, laid-out tight.

cuddies – family/kinfolk
murrr! – young whelp/brat
neon blue – bliss
blotter – pure LSD
el bleen – pure Afghan heroin
blang – darkness/nothing/blank
hook-up – wedding
down – ready

Offline daisyxo

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Re: Romeo and Juliet Redux (sonnet)
« Reply #1 on: July 17, 2018, 07:09 AM »
Hey mojo.... this poem sparks the desire to read over and over again.  It's definitely edgy, and I appreciate the word translations.  I would love to hear this one recorded (as each poet writes with his/her own tone, and voice reflection in their head).
~ Marsha ~
 

"Abilities wither under faultfinding, blossom with encouragement." -- Donald A. Laird

Offline mojojames

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Re: Romeo and Juliet Redux (sonnet)
« Reply #2 on: July 17, 2018, 07:47 AM »
Marsha - Am pleased it struck a note for you.  I added audio.  RC

Offline daisyxo

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Re: Romeo and Juliet Redux (sonnet)
« Reply #3 on: July 17, 2018, 08:20 AM »
Wow, love it even more now ... this one definitely needs to be heard.  Thanks for adding the spoken word!!!
~ Marsha ~
 

"Abilities wither under faultfinding, blossom with encouragement." -- Donald A. Laird