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Offline wendyemma32

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Velvet Steel (Adult)
« on: December 12, 2012, 12:39 AM »
         He pulled her into him, teasing her with the touch of his body
   the little shocks of pleasure flooding her core
         he ground himself gently against her, watching as the desire in
   her eyes flared, his lips covered hers as his hot tongue plundered and explored
         Give yourself to me, his thick and gruff voice whispered hotly into
    her mouth, his teeth nipping her bottom lip inflaming her need
         he yanked her up and turned her around, "hands on the table",
     he growled, he thrust his velvet steel deeply into her channel, making her beg and plead
         She moaned deeply as her inner muscles clenched convulsively
      around his rod, as he pressed into her deep
         he ravaged her in fast strokes, pumping just the head into her
           in short rapid thrusts, hearing her whimper as her juices start to seep
         His velvet rod filled her completely, stretching her as he comtinued
        to pound into her, she didn't want his thrusts to cease
         he pressed deeply into her convulsing core, both of
   them shouting at their intense release

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Re: Velvet Steel (Adult)
« Reply #1 on: December 12, 2012, 07:12 PM »

This is cliche and has the feel of cookie cutter romance/ erotica. No offense, got anything else?
If I may make a suggestion: try writing something without "trying" to create the mood. keep it real

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