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Offline Halo

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no legitimate title
« on: April 06, 2013, 01:04 AM »


I wonder
if the letting of history
mine -
will be like essence of blood
charting disturbing words
out of my lungs
non-prevaricating breaths
exhaling me
all over the page

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Re: no legitimate title
« Reply #1 on: April 06, 2013, 12:31 PM »
Being a connoisseur of history, let the letting begin.
Stop looking at the light. Instead, look at what is being illuminated by the light.

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« Reply #2 on: April 06, 2013, 09:34 PM »

A rather scary prospect when the letting is personal. However, the process is initiated. Thanks A-FRIEND!
Be careful of your thoughts; they may become words at any moment.  ~  Ira Gassen

Offline dublinsteve

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Re: no legitimate title
« Reply #3 on: April 06, 2013, 09:39 PM »
Halo, why not break it differently?  The thought and words are there...

I wonder
if the letting of history
mine -
will be like essence of blood
charting disturbing words
out of my lungs
non-prevaricating breaths
exhaling me
all over the page

...or something of that ilk.  Just a thought as I read your dandy typings.

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Re: no legitimate title
« Reply #4 on: April 06, 2013, 10:40 PM »
How strange, that is how I had it formatted when I posted it.
Doubt crept in, I crept in and changed it.  Now I'm going to change
it back.  Thanks for that, much appreciated, Steve. :)
Be careful of your thoughts; they may become words at any moment.  ~  Ira Gassen