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Offline SkaaDee

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Moment at a Crosswalk
« on: September 25, 2012, 10:59 AM »
mourning said morning he heard
head bowed, john, weather?
jeff too but nothing spoken

streets, tire sounds and beeps
like folds in commotion
light red john said still in care?

yes, changed, jeff went first
sun into September,
afternoons beneath a walnut tree

clouds parted
from grey to midday, eyes
met but no goodbye



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Re: Moment at a Crosswalk
« Reply #1 on: September 26, 2012, 05:23 AM »


Interesting.


Not quite sure but "mourning" pervades.






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Re: Moment at a Crosswalk
« Reply #2 on: October 03, 2012, 08:50 AM »
It has taken me a few reads to get a bit of a picture here. I enjoyed your style in this piece.  :)
Be careful of your thoughts; they may become words at any moment.  ~  Ira Gassen

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Re: Moment at a Crosswalk
« Reply #3 on: October 11, 2012, 02:09 PM »

thanks for the comments!