Topic: Lust

[Goldenpen]

You are the raw ripeness, my sweet juice desires.
Touching, feeling, tasting, the ecstasy of all that is you.
 
K.W

[Bill]

Goldenpen,

This is not a poem.

It is not well written prose.

Try again.

Bill

[cafeRg]

Bill, this is not a workshop..

[Bill]

cafeRg,

If it were a workshop, I would have pointed out the specific flaws.

What I offered was a comment.  And the comment stands.

Bill

[Goldenpen]

Thankyou for the comments... Bill, this is what inspired my writting.
Rumi is one of my favourite poets, some of his works are quite evocative and beautiful.
For lovers, the only teacher is the beauty of the Beloved. ~Rumi
Delight in devotion and become a river of honey. ~Rumi
Oh there will be more erotic poetry coming from me, it is such a joy to write and read

[Kay]

Goldenpen,

Rumi is one of my favorite poets as well. I haven't been into this forum for some time.
I have read posts by people where it was not a poem. I don't think that statement is justified in any way with this poem, so that is my comment and are we in a shooting gallery around here now? 

[Goldenpen]

Your kind words are appreciated Kay, thankyou and nice to meet another fan of Rumi