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Offline TheCoach757

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Almost A Love Poem
« on: July 30, 2012, 03:44 AM »
<a href="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jwO1eN0D6vE&amp;feature=youtube_gdata_player" target="_blank" class="new_win">http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jwO1eN0D6vE&amp;feature=youtube_gdata_player</a>

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Re: Almost A Love Poem
« Reply #1 on: July 30, 2012, 04:39 AM »
Hi coach, whatever you've posted I can't see it.  :)
Be careful of your thoughts; they may become words at any moment.  ~  Ira Gassen

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Re: Almost A Love Poem
« Reply #2 on: July 30, 2012, 02:45 PM »
heres the link
Almost A Love Poem


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Re: Almost A Love Poem
« Reply #3 on: August 04, 2012, 08:50 PM »
Coach, out of the three vid's you've posted this is the one your confidence in your writing shows in speech and delivery. And the piece that has the flow!
The other two pieces may be more personal or your not so secure in the quality, I'm not sure...but you might want to slow yourself down just a little, give people time to absorb your poetry, what you're actually saying. I enjoyed this piece very much, the other two need some tightening up. - all the best, Halo
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Re: Almost A Love Poem
« Reply #4 on: August 05, 2012, 12:57 AM »
thanks im going to look into that so i can work on making it better