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Offline illiterati

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hyacinths
« on: June 04, 2012, 12:05 PM »



I watch
        a little black thing of
                hair
        and string,
        lashes

dashed between bangs and sad
        little lashing tail
                and teeth (I

                remember lying
                        on the garage floor,
                                the bumps of the carpet
                        a pox,
                the line of your nails a

                                satisfied sink
                        in the back –

                clacked teeth crashed,
                        “Do you want to?” / “I
                                do.” / “Are you sure?” / I didn’t

                answer only
                        entered. You
                                grew red and
                        preoccupied;
                I screamed

                                precious whispers at you
                        but never spoke. When the sun came up
                I could not come and you were
                        tired, spent, exhausted, while I
                           was only empty

                           (There is
                                   a terrible name
                                           on your whispers,
                                   an unmarked rustle

                                of nothing

                     .)

             .)

     .


How long will you pace
        back and
forth, just doing your job?

                hidden behind those bangs bagging
        with plastic
or paper arranging
                                boxes in their eyelike,
                                        vacant shelves?

where will you go tonight?

will you take off your belt?

will you stand in front of the black
        window at midnight and press flesh
                to the naked glass and feel cold

        and eternal
and empty?

        will you count stars on your tongue
        as you catch them?

how long will you shake your
        keys at your
                   hip,
                   and see me,
                   refusing to look?

There is a savage, red veil on the moon.
My hyacinths are melting.

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Re: hyacinths
« Reply #1 on: June 04, 2012, 01:48 PM »

interesting scenes

the ..Do you want to ..are you sure ..excellent

Just curious
is there a reason why
you didn't type the
poem out?

or
am I missing something?

Disclaimer: cafeRg could be wrong.

Offline illiterati

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Re: hyacinths
« Reply #2 on: June 04, 2012, 02:10 PM »
no good reason. it's an older poem - only had a .pdf version on the laptop, and no pdf converter, so...

like i said, no good reason.

and thanks for the compliments.

-matt

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Re: hyacinths
« Reply #3 on: June 04, 2012, 02:38 PM »
it's very small print *hic*

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Re: hyacinths
« Reply #4 on: June 25, 2012, 10:24 AM »
Matt, I enjoyed reading this very much. Lots of touching moments... lovely poetry!
Be careful of your thoughts; they may become words at any moment.  ~  Ira Gassen

Offline illiterati

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Re: hyacinths
« Reply #5 on: June 25, 2012, 12:50 PM »

halo - thank you for the read and the compliment.

this was the one of the ones that beloit rejected so speedily! (that's ok, it's already looking for a new home elsewhere)

kay -

sorry for the long delay, but i replaced the images with text. the spacing is a little bit messed up due to the conversion of "tab" to spaces.

-matt


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Re: hyacinths
« Reply #6 on: June 25, 2012, 10:09 PM »
Stars on the tongue is breathtaking.

I thought of "as you taste them" would really cap it off. Since the tongue is the noun, it would be more tactile. in any case, I love the line.



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will you count stars on your tongue
        as you catch them?