Topic: Distinction

[anel]

He gave me a scarf
the color of white pillows
a smile that makes you think of peppermint
and lavender left in the shadows.
I never made a distinction
between the blood orange slices
he'd leave on the countertop

or the maps curled by the side of the sofa
when he left.

I still see him now and then, with eyelids
closed, as the tops of the trees
meet a grove of wild persimmons.

[PSM]

He gave me a scarf
the color of white pillows
a smile that makes you think of peppermint
amd lavender left in the shadows.
I never made a distintion
between the blood orange slices
he'd leave on the countertop

or the maps curled by the side of the sofa
when he left.

For me, that's the entire experience. I really liked this piece.
Enough so, I fell off the wagon and jumped right back into this cyber poetry addiction.
You have a typo: amd should be and. I think or should be and, but I'm not the best when it comes to grammar.

Anel, I look forward to reading more from you. Intrigued.

Take care of yourself,

PSM

[anel]

PSM,
Thank you for commenting! And I like the concise way you see this. I know all about
wagons, I espeically poetry wagon and mine's been broken down a few times itself.
Hope to read something of yours.
thanks again. honored to be your "1st" post.

[PSM]

Hey Anel,

Here's a sample of what I have done in the past:

http://www.tinroofalleypoets.org/poetry_boards/index.php/topic,16302.0.html

If I may steal from Prince, the artist formerly known as that, I am Marsupial Man. Or, I was.

This is an amazing site. I have been supported, poked, and prodded into whatever I am now.

Take care,

Paul

[anel]

Paul! Y


Yes, I know you. Through a series of rather horrific events, I lost most of my accounts,
my passwords and almost my love for writing. But I still have most of my sanity.
I posted here as Kay way back when. Hopefully,  I can do some more writting.
 Curious as to why you had to also open a new account as well, but hey, you know,none of my business.
So do write more. I'd love to read more ok? and be well. 

[PSM]

Holy cow, batman!

Kay. Really?
Wonderful.
Love the piece even more.
Karma.

With love,

Paul

[anel]

Paul,

wonderful karma! I didn't think anyone would remember me. Thank you. You made my day!
 


everything happens for a reason

[Halo]

anel - love the poem, the imagery and the emotion it inspires.

Kay? This Kay by any chance http://www.tinroofalleypoets.org/poetry_boards/index.php/topic,16100.0.html?

 Paul, oh WOW, good to see you...missed you and your poetry. 

[anel]

Hi Halo,

yes, the same, no worse for wear I guess. Coming in from the wars. 

thanks for reminding me of that old poem. I love it and had forgotten it.

[Halo]

Welcome home Kay, I've been wondering where you were, just recently even.  So good to be reading you again.
And I love that poem too. You, Paul and I saw Trout had commented...wonderful!

[anel]

Halo,  you are kind. When I read your name, I always think of an angel 

[Halo]

Oh, I only look like an  ... but that's sweet of you to say, Kay. 

[7]

a smile that makes you think of peppermint
and lavender left in the shadows.

appreciated this. fav line(s) above

~7

[A_Mourning_Glory]

Anel - Kay

This is such a romantic piece full of bitterweet..... very much like it.

I remember Paul, too.  I somehow was locked out for a long time, gave up, and then decided to try to find everyone again.  I miss a lot of people who no longer post.  I feel maybe they lost their way, too.... maybe some more will come back.

Good to see/read you.  Not much writing here for now... maybe in time.

Cherri