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Offline cy street

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our 5th 7/11
« on: July 01, 2011, 03:26 AM »
our 5th 7/11


i want to be the sun
in your sunbath
down in mexico

when we open air
can we take it slow
 
let�s let the wind go
kiss some waves
breakers
ya, i said so
 
bartender
we want crickets
cactus tacos

two more sunsets
i know the back roads
 
can i be the sun
in your sunbath
down in mexico

when we open air
can we take it slow
 
licking your glass
the channel changes
there are wagers
for
and against us
 
go ahead laugh
i did
i do
and will
until
my last breath
 
bartender
we want crickets
cactus tacos

two more sunsets
i know the back roads
 
i want to be the sun
in your sunbath
down in mexico

when we open air
can we take it slow
"Disappointing you...is getting me down..."

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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #1 on: July 01, 2011, 05:34 AM »
I like this, cy guy, and I like your format.

There's only one line where I balked and it was this: ya, i said so.

I'm sure you can be more creative than that. Give us something more "cy-ish," something sensual and sensuous.









I listen for each lonely breath.

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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #2 on: July 08, 2011, 02:27 AM »
Cy---


gives good access.

the repeated lines, maybe, still ruminating.

the disjunctions---the transitions---work well here:   


when we open air
can we take it slow


layers there, allure, almost an innocence.

 

and here:

bartender
we want crickets
cactus tacos

two more sunsets



can someone have a big hat pushed back on his head like a bad movie?


very good poem and i agree with Witt about the line she mentioned.

great title.


bernie


 
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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #3 on: July 08, 2011, 10:16 PM »
W & M, thanks for your takes.  We are recording tonight.  Audio & Video coming shortly...
C
"Disappointing you...is getting me down..."

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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #4 on: July 09, 2011, 02:46 AM »
M, the work in question is a love song i have written for s mulholland to be performed by c bickley for our fifth anniversary.  when we went to record this afternoon, he asked what words i had from our last trip to mexico that we might use to layer the background.  so, i went back to the dates and found something i wrote to you, which has found it's way into the recording/video (cheers):

mister mojave,
in the backwoods of quintana roo,
where the jaguar
and howlers sing lullabies
to the foot moons
and venus,
they make a margarita
that transcends poetry.

please do not hold me
to the exactness
of the recipe.

as you might imagine,
the research was mind bending.

as best as i can recall
which usually is not so well

you take two fresh squeezed limes
ten perfectly square euclid approved ice cubes
a steely silver tequila
a splash of controy
and shake sexually
until the ice harmonizes with the wind

filter into a generous crystal

"i know, you know this much already"

now
pay close attention

inside your half jurassic salt rimmed glass
take out your eye dropper of joyas oaxaquenas
and press two precious drops of pre cortez history
into your afternoon

SWAK
C
"Disappointing you...is getting me down..."

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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #5 on: July 09, 2011, 02:59 AM »
Cy----

perfecto.



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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #6 on: July 09, 2011, 03:00 AM »
Salud from the c in your cider...
"Disappointing you...is getting me down..."

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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #7 on: July 09, 2011, 03:04 AM »
and just so you know,

down austin way
a perfecto is:

four key limes
reposado
cointreau
con
rocas
con
sal

peace tambien
c
"Disappointing you...is getting me down..."

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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #8 on: July 09, 2011, 03:30 AM »
Cy---


Chichicapa, Mexico

Mezcal Del Maguey Chichicapa

http://ibpc.webdelsol.com/poems/chichicapa-mexico




gracias


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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #9 on: July 10, 2011, 05:59 PM »
masel tov

2 More Sunsets


"Disappointing you...is getting me down..."

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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #10 on: July 12, 2011, 05:46 AM »
Cy---

loved the song.

when we open air
can we take it slow



happy anniversary

bernie

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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #11 on: July 13, 2011, 01:33 AM »
Salud!
"Disappointing you...is getting me down..."

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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #12 on: August 10, 2011, 06:04 PM »
turned up and become a bit of a bitch, as usual.
but, both my sister and I are fans of this song.

the world is better for it.

cheers.

(poem on the other hand makes you a songwriter - whole other mess)


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Re: our 5th 7/11
« Reply #13 on: August 17, 2011, 08:15 PM »
Repetition is a great teacher and this repetition in your poem  taught me to love this poem.

Really nice, almost lyrical, well, yes, it is lyrical.  Thanks. Nice touch of location/food/tit for tat going on.
sometimes you just have to close everyone out and slice the lime