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Offline SkaaDee

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the Past
« on: June 08, 2011, 01:26 PM »
in the past I've read poetry incorrectly
it's the heart that matters
it's the why

what have you to say
as you carry water
it's a stretch on your road
 

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Re: the Past
« Reply #1 on: June 08, 2011, 06:53 PM »
In the future,
read more poetry
by pros who know prose
and are punctilious
about punctuation,
even when they are posing
a figure of speech.
Such reading can teach
how to reach
the heart of another.
For if you cannot reach it,
why bother?

For the heart of any matter,
and the desire to share
what matters to the heart,
are both lost causes
if there is a break down in the brain
which leads to the same refrain
heard before,
and hopefully
never heard again.
As unique as any given heartbeat
should be the rhythm
which reflects it,
and the words which project it
with paper and ink.





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Re: the Past
« Reply #2 on: June 08, 2011, 10:01 PM »

What a lovely surprise, SkaaDee, good to see you.

Punctuation, rhyme and form are empty without the heartbeat of our words!

Halo
Be careful of your thoughts; they may become words at any moment.  ~  Ira Gassen

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Re: the Past
« Reply #3 on: June 09, 2011, 01:06 AM »
Halo,

You make my point.  I did not say words lack impact.  Stanza two's point is that they do, but that it is wise to avoid cliche'.  In stanza one, I said that punctuation, form, and rhyme also may be essential components in the artistry of poetry.  It is not simply, much less only, a matter of the spontaneous overflow of the heart in words which only mean something to the author.  Or why share it at all?

Regards,
Bill

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Re: the Past
« Reply #4 on: June 09, 2011, 06:37 AM »
It's great to see you back with us again! Poetry is an elusive thing.




Offline SkaaDee

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Re: the Past
« Reply #5 on: June 09, 2011, 11:36 AM »
Thanks everyone!

...and I consider it some kind of triumph to be able to initiate controversy out of seeming banality.


:)


I know in the past I valued experimentation and distinctness over feeling mixed with ink,
at least in my own writing.
I still value experimentation, but contend, our time here is too short to not say.



 


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Re: the Past
« Reply #6 on: June 09, 2011, 11:39 AM »
In the future,
read more poetry
by pros who know prose
and are punctilious
about punctuation,
even when they are posing
a figure of speech.
Such reading can teach
how to reach
the heart of another.
For if you cannot reach it,
why bother?

For the heart of any matter,
and the desire to share
what matters to the heart,
are both lost causes
if there is a break down in the brain
which leads to the same refrain
heard before,
and hopefully
never heard again.
As unique as any given heartbeat
should be the rhythm
which reflects it,
and the words which project it
with paper and ink.



This is good.
Kind of a playful rap.

The clang of percussion.