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Offline Wordweaver

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I Warned You
« on: March 28, 2010, 10:59 PM »
I warned you

I warned you about infidelity
and the tribunal of justice.
I seethed in silent anger
before consenting to your
separation and new union.

I purchased silk and screws
then constructed you
a new over sized home from
the finest of wood. 
With plenty of room for two
closing the lid on my past.

It is delightful to hear the two
of you so close now, as I listen
to your moans through the tubes.
I hope you share those drops of
water I pour sparingly into the box.

Summer passed and fall is here
and I miss the sounds beneath the
ground.  I reused the schedule 40
and plugged the holes so no traces
of the chapel or your last marriage
survive, alive. 




Weave
a good poet is like a bride
Something old, something new, something borrowed
but mostly you.

Offline witt

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #1 on: March 31, 2010, 05:10 AM »
Oh, my goodness! Creepy to the nth!!
I listen for each lonely breath.

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #2 on: March 31, 2010, 09:25 AM »
Blood curdling, chilling tale of revenge...I liked it though. Nice write!
Be careful of your thoughts; they may become words at any moment.  ~  Ira Gassen

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #3 on: March 31, 2010, 09:06 PM »
sounds like a plot for movie - wicked, for sure
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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #4 on: April 01, 2010, 10:54 AM »
My first attempt at this type Witt, might as well go all in.  ;D
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a good poet is like a bride
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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #5 on: April 01, 2010, 10:56 AM »
Thanks again Halo and glad you liked it, this was done on a whim.
Weave
a good poet is like a bride
Something old, something new, something borrowed
but mostly you.

Offline Wordweaver

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #6 on: April 01, 2010, 10:59 AM »
Daisy,  It is a bad boy poem penned  by a good boy.   :sunny :poet
Weave
a good poet is like a bride
Something old, something new, something borrowed
but mostly you.

Offline Allen

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #7 on: April 01, 2010, 11:19 PM »
My first attempt at this type Witt, might as well go all in.  ;D

You mean you ain't no psychopath?  you gone done scared me!

Offline Wordweaver

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #8 on: April 03, 2010, 12:31 AM »
Why Allen my man, I wouldn't harm a fly.  You know that schedule 40 is some versatile stuff.   ;D
Weave
a good poet is like a bride
Something old, something new, something borrowed
but mostly you.

Offline DU_Poetry

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #9 on: April 05, 2010, 11:17 AM »
Wordweaver, I enjoyed your poem. I like the dark themes entwined with delicate imagery ("silk", "finest of wood" and "drops of water"). A beautifully constructed piece.

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #10 on: April 05, 2010, 12:05 PM »
I am most pleased  you liked it DU, maybe I will try another one soon.  Thank you so much  :sunny
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Something old, something new, something borrowed
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Offline Soft Words

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #11 on: June 19, 2010, 12:20 PM »
Oooooh. creepy. me likey, since I'm still above ground and reading.
Life isn't about waiting for the storms to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #12 on: June 24, 2010, 04:51 PM »
Wow. Exceedingly disturbing.

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Re: I Warned You
« Reply #13 on: June 24, 2010, 06:37 PM »
WW, I normally avoid dark and gothic poetry (and thoughts for that matter)
 but I found this very effective.