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Offline Mystic1

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Transitory Nature
« on: December 13, 2008, 01:12 PM »
pure white lotus
ripples tranquil pond,
rooted for now.

north wind beckons
leaf beneath my feet,
ever-changing.

red balloon floats
on vast ocean sky,
one soul's journey

noisy chirping
perhaps you've returned,
summer cricket?
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Re: Transition
« Reply #1 on: December 13, 2008, 01:15 PM »
Thank you Cookie...for the use of your lotus. G. 
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Re: Transitory Nature
« Reply #2 on: December 14, 2008, 12:51 AM »
honey in my soul
sweet white lotus in disguise
taste upon my tongue

hear the chirp of frogs
and the song of whip-or-will
close my eyes and breath

transcend space and time
gentle rhythm of the waves
calls for love divine

.... I have a hard time NOT rhyming
 
Cookie...

"A dream you dream alone is only a dream. A dream you dream together is reality." John Lennon

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Re: Transitory Nature
« Reply #3 on: December 14, 2008, 02:35 AM »
Beautiful haiku, Voo. (See, I can rhyme if I want to.)  :tongue

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...I have a hard time NOT rhyming.

That's something you have in common with the Japanese...they endeavor not to rhyme...because so much of their native tongue naturally does. G.
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Re: Transitory Nature
« Reply #4 on: December 15, 2008, 03:08 PM »
Mystic,

what I come away from this is that red balloon.
For some reason, that image really made this sing for me.
smiling at Cookie, it's hard not to rhyme sometimes!

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Re: Transitory Nature
« Reply #5 on: December 15, 2008, 03:46 PM »
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Mystic,

What I come away from this is that red balloon.
For some reason, that image really made this sing for me.

Thank you, Kay. You got it...that balloon is the true focal point of the piece. The theme of this haiku is of course, resurrection reincarnation.
I know that probably seems obvious. I am also aware that many people don’t believe in this particular possibility, but it is a core tenet of the Buddhist religion...and much of their poetry centers around this subject. Perhaps I offer explanation where none is expected or even necessary - thereby spoiling the effectiveness of the piece...

In Buddhist tradition, the lower forms of life, are souls which have evolved to a higher state of being. - G.



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Re: Transitory Nature
« Reply #6 on: December 15, 2008, 03:51 PM »
Mystic,

no, I didn't know that and thanks for the detail.
I have a friend on another board who is a Buddhist
but mostly we talk about poetry so hadn't gotten into
anything like that. Very, very interesting and helps me
understand this more.  :rose

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Re: Transitory Nature
« Reply #7 on: December 15, 2008, 04:13 PM »
Kay,

What I meant to say was reincarnation.

Sometimes it's hard to keep so many religious principals seperate in my head...sorry for the transliteration. (Now my previous post should make a little more sense.) G.
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Re: Transitory Nature
« Reply #8 on: December 15, 2008, 04:32 PM »
oh, you know, duh, well, I didn't even catch that!
Of course, it would be that! See I'm just not that
familiar with all of it. My family has so many varied
beliefs but Buddhism is not one so I don't
know that much about it. Thanks for clarification!  :rose

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Re: Transitory Nature
« Reply #9 on: January 15, 2009, 10:57 PM »
Mystic Meister,

There is one word for this poem.

Serenity


Thank you,

Trout

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Re: Transitory Nature
« Reply #10 on: January 15, 2009, 11:41 PM »
Trout The Light Fish-tastic

Thank you for rippling this placid pond with your pleasant presence...

You are most welcome. G.
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