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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #14 on: December 02, 2008, 05:19 AM »
Yes, SW, you passed. I find tanka difficult to write.

Mystic, I didn't mean to leave you alone in here, but as I said, I find these much more difficult to write. I started one yesterday, gave up, and just put it in minimalist poems instead. I didn't feel like counting.

The word is syllabically, and that's why I find tanka a bit more difficult unless it's in the form of 5-7-5-7-7.

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« Reply #15 on: December 02, 2008, 03:04 PM »
Witt, noted and corrected. My internal spell check is on the fritz again. I may have to put in a call to the Manufacturer. I think I have a screw loose somewhere. Yes, I know these are difficult...(But don't let that discourage you. Even the Masters struggled.) I suppose that's why I find them so appealing. Athough, it may be a bit easier for me - Reads Bill Webster...for fun.

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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #16 on: December 02, 2008, 04:11 PM »
I wasn't fussing. You just asked if that was a word and I wanted you to know that it is.

I'll have to try a little harder.

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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #17 on: December 02, 2008, 04:23 PM »
I went back to the minimalist poem that I wrote, and this is what came to me.

precipitant leaves
tumble across the lawn
disappear into denuded woods
whirlwinds swirling upward
bring leaves back again


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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #18 on: December 02, 2008, 05:50 PM »
Excellent Tanka there, Witt. Oh, I knew you weren't being fussy. It was late (or early) when I made that post. I knew it was a word, but I was just being lazy about looking it up. I also knew you would correct it for me...that's why I asked. Thanks. G.
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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #19 on: December 02, 2008, 08:31 PM »
detachment of Self,
when the world again is pure -
darkness drifts away.
abandon your fleeting despair -
let moon and flowers guide you.

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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #20 on: December 02, 2008, 11:05 PM »
secret trickles in
the hushed silence of your moans...
i could build temples
to your form and the shy smile
on your lips after we are done.
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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #21 on: December 04, 2008, 12:07 AM »
with penetrating stare,
calculated paces;
the caged tigress
wills her heart free,
through empty spaces
between bars -
captive Zen.
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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #22 on: December 05, 2008, 02:52 AM »
mirrored translucence
realizes transcendence -
icicle's cool mood
transitions from blue to green.
evolutionary flow.


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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #23 on: December 05, 2008, 02:34 PM »
first kiss -
illicit rendezvous
temptation's caress
lovers giggle and blush.

in the wash -
ruby red lipstick
on his collar.
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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #24 on: December 05, 2008, 05:13 PM »
congregant crows -
await corn's epiphany,
dressed in Sunday finery -
swept by westering hope,
straw footprints on yellow brick.


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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #25 on: December 06, 2008, 01:08 AM »

contractions released
intentions deliberate 
pulsing silver tongues

mouths,
eager for their reward

drunk with anticipation

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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #26 on: December 06, 2008, 02:14 AM »
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Our life is shaped by our mind; we become what we think.
Suffering follows evil thoughts, as the wheels of a cart follow the ox that draws it.
Joy follows pure thoughts, like a shadow that never leaves.
~ Buddha

in the footfalls of the ox,
purposefulness.
in the mind of its driver,
emptiness.
in passing shadows, 
single-mindedness.
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Re: Tanka Territory
« Reply #27 on: December 06, 2008, 05:52 AM »
Mystic and T, you have really impressed me with your tanka expertise!