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witt

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #28 on: January 29, 2008, 06:06 AM »
Thanks, daisy, for the pic.

These are great responses! Fabulous imaginations.

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #29 on: January 29, 2008, 09:54 PM »
You're welcome Witt .... glad to help inspire. 

These are great poems, Rach and medusaeyes ... love your interpretation of the picture.  Here's my attempt - full of cliche's, but it was fun to write.

A Face in the Crowd

A house is a home,
but only after
warmth is created
with love and character.
To touch their hearts,
you must invite them in -
share part of yourself,
and only then
will people emerge
from within their shells,
to share their triumphs,
their personal hells.
So come together,
each face in the crowd -
sing it from the rooftops,
sing it out loud.
Tell me your story,
share your heart
and laughter, -
together we'll create a
happily-ever-after.
Make yourself at home
come one, come all -
break through, be free,
tear down those walls.
You'll each have a turn
to stand on your own.
Turn the volume up
let your thoughts be known.
Then later when you feel like
just a face in the crowd,
someone will notice
say your name out loud.
From a faceless nobody
to a well-known friend -
the heart of a home
to welcome within.
~ Marsha ~
 

"Abilities wither under faultfinding, blossom with encouragement." -- Donald A. Laird

witt

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #30 on: January 30, 2008, 06:07 AM »
Oh, I liked it, daisy.

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #31 on: January 30, 2008, 11:19 AM »
Me too, very good.  It fits the picture very well.
Allen

An action promulgated out of desperation will inevitably end in tragedy; for as its anagram so aptly foretells:  A rope ends it. �

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #32 on: January 31, 2008, 02:31 AM »
I got fired today

On a sunny summer day,
like so many we plod through,
I had no premonition that this day
would be unlike any other

As I arrived at work "old man" Swarmock said,
"Can you step in my office?"
He mumbled some unpleasantries,
before telling me to clean out my desk

All the faces of my former coworkers
looked away from me, to avoid my gaze.
It was so surreal to be back home
by 10am in the morning?...

It was in this instant I made a life choice,
To play a concert to save the world.
I grabbed my acoustic guitar, climbed the stairs
went out through the spare bedroom window

Onto the  highest point of my rooftop
the world awaited my debut
carrying my music in my heart
the faces in the neighborhood all gawked

All I need to survive is my acoustic
frozen in time, between the sky and the clouds
I will rock this town to save my own soul
As a gust of wind catches my chest....


 
The clouds told him their names, in the quiet of the summer afternoon
Charles Simic from "The World Doesn't End"

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #33 on: January 31, 2008, 05:52 PM »
thanks Witt :)  and thank you, Allen :)         

fragments, nice visual - fits the picture well.
~ Marsha ~
 

"Abilities wither under faultfinding, blossom with encouragement." -- Donald A. Laird

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #34 on: January 31, 2008, 08:55 PM »
I agree.  These are all great poems!  Good job everybody!  Keep them coming!

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #35 on: February 01, 2008, 04:46 AM »
I liked yours too Daisy
it had a strong feel of the picture--by using wordplay--Liked it
The clouds told him their names, in the quiet of the summer afternoon
Charles Simic from "The World Doesn't End"

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #36 on: February 01, 2008, 12:33 PM »
On the basis that SplashHall is a place where all are welcome, and great poets can be seen with poor poets, I proudly submit the following:  My poor effort to visualize this challenge.

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Often, I think myself alone.
Strumming on high rooftop
just my guitar and me.

From all, isolated
in a sea of cloned roofs.
Not even
A hummingbird in sight.

I peer out.
Nothing
but identical twin peaks.
Clone upon clone

Coalescing with seclusion.
Becoming one with silence.

And loneliness sets in.

Blue

My eyes shoot to the horizon.
I see roof faces
smiling at me
And hear
roof mouths singing with me.
Allen

An action promulgated out of desperation will inevitably end in tragedy; for as its anagram so aptly foretells:  A rope ends it. �

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #37 on: February 01, 2008, 09:32 PM »
Smiling faces
mouths agape
watch as I teeter
on the precipice.
Do they imagine
me a shooting star.
Or, even less,
a movie star.
If I should fly
from off this place
would any recall
my sallow face?
Chomh sean leis an cheo agus níos sine faoi dhó.

witt

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #38 on: February 02, 2008, 06:41 AM »
I like both of these, allen and merlin. Would you think that I'm hip if I say, "You rock!"

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #39 on: February 02, 2008, 06:44 PM »
Mdme. Director - Ever hippie.
Chomh sean leis an cheo agus níos sine faoi dhó.

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #40 on: February 03, 2008, 08:57 PM »
Allen your interpretation is very cool .... a sea of cloned roofs, not a hummingbird in sight - love that part.

Merlin .... would any recall?  good question, and fits very well.
~ Marsha ~
 

"Abilities wither under faultfinding, blossom with encouragement." -- Donald A. Laird

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Re: Ecphrasis
« Reply #41 on: February 03, 2008, 09:02 PM »
Good writes, guys!  Enjoyed reading them.